Because he had curly hair, that was too lazy to stand up

He never wore shoes, had grass blades and dirt for socks

And always had his hands up-

Spoke with accent so thick, English became scared

Thought the world spun only on Tuesdays

And never got classified as weird.

Before father was just man, in between crossed legs he’d fit

When smoking was bad, and music made sense

Just after movies cost so little, no cable, no flick-

Television had two channels, so cartoons were a delicacy

Poverty was normalization, uptown was another nation

Quite a sight for blues eyes to sea’.

You’re so troubled, and wasting time has become your hobby

Yet it isn’t your fault, tea? No? Alright.

At least you used to drink this, when you were darker.

I guess it’s only emotional now, you’ll wake up when you’re alive.


About Oil Underneath

I drink glasses of cold water.
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18 Responses to Hibiscus.

  1. systematicweasel says:

    You always have some visually awesome way of presenting your works! Great post! =)


  2. Jingle says:

    very visual and vivid description of your character…
    beautiful poem!

  3. Great post indeed! And you are so right, you cant make this stuff up. It’s why I always prefer real life to fiction, if you put it into fiction a publisher would say it’s not believable! I actually wrote the story of Marcel in prose at http://stardreamingwithsherrybluesky.blogspot.com/2010/08/remembering-marcel.html
    if you are interested. Thanks for stopping by, reading and commenting. I so appreciate it and am enjoying exploring your work very much. Write on!!!!!!

  4. Lynette says:

    Such a well-written poem – so immediate and clear that we get a visual right away! Your work is always dynamic…


  5. Diane says:

    A very strong poem that has lots of impact! The ending is stunning!

  6. Mary says:

    Powerfully written. I agree with Sherry. I too prefer real life to fiction. Strong words here.

  7. Pingback: Thursday Poets Rally Week 30 | Jingle

  8. You conjured the words nicely here to create a scene that is interesting…I love the strike through in the last lines…creative write.


  9. Jingle says:


    welcome to Rally week 30,
    a most 3 poems are accepted within 7 days…
    Happy Thursday!

  10. Shashi says:

    Very interesting and lovely.. you know the hibiscus flower it the preferred flower for the worship of Goddess Kali …I enjoyed your last line… very much

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

  11. viddhi says:

    strong poetry …very impact-full ..loved it !

  12. I loved the truth and power in the poem. Thank you for sharing.

  13. ladynimue says:

    this was brilliant !!!! too powerful !!

  14. fiveloaf says:

    very different style- nice..

  15. Jingle says:


    welcome to our poetry potluck by linking in 1 to 3 poems.
    Thanks for the support,
    Happy Tuesday!

  16. signed .............bkm says:

    it is a brillant piece love the spinning only on tuesdays….glad you are highlighted as blog of the week at Poets United ….your writing is refeshing ….thank you…bkm

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