Because he had curly hair, that was too lazy to stand up
He never wore shoes, had grass blades and dirt for socks
And always had his hands up-
Spoke with accent so thick, English became scared
Thought the world spun only on Tuesdays
And never got classified as weird.
Before father was just man, in between crossed legs he’d fit
When smoking was bad, and music made sense
Just after movies cost so little, no cable, no flick-
Television had two channels, so cartoons were a delicacy
Poverty was normalization, uptown was another nation
Quite a sight for blues eyes to sea’.
You’re so troubled, and wasting time has become your hobby
Yet it isn’t your fault, tea? No? Alright.
At least you used to drink this, when you were darker.
I guess it’s only emotional now, you’ll wake up when you’re alive.
-Richí
You always have some visually awesome way of presenting your works! Great post! =)
-Weasel
very visual and vivid description of your character…
beautiful poem!
🙂
Great post indeed! And you are so right, you cant make this stuff up. It’s why I always prefer real life to fiction, if you put it into fiction a publisher would say it’s not believable! I actually wrote the story of Marcel in prose at http://stardreamingwithsherrybluesky.blogspot.com/2010/08/remembering-marcel.html
if you are interested. Thanks for stopping by, reading and commenting. I so appreciate it and am enjoying exploring your work very much. Write on!!!!!!
Such a well-written poem – so immediate and clear that we get a visual right away! Your work is always dynamic…
Lynette
A very strong poem that has lots of impact! The ending is stunning!
Powerfully written. I agree with Sherry. I too prefer real life to fiction. Strong words here.
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You conjured the words nicely here to create a scene that is interesting…I love the strike through in the last lines…creative write.
Cheers.
welcome to Rally week 30,
a most 3 poems are accepted within 7 days…
Happy Thursday!
Very interesting and lovely.. you know the hibiscus flower it the preferred flower for the worship of Goddess Kali …I enjoyed your last line… very much
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strong poetry …very impact-full ..loved it !
I loved the truth and power in the poem. Thank you for sharing.
this was brilliant !!!! too powerful !!
I like the flow and the scheme of it.
Very nice.
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very different style- nice..
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Thanks for the support,
Happy Tuesday!
awards for you…
love your sweet nature.
it is a brillant piece love the spinning only on tuesdays….glad you are highlighted as blog of the week at Poets United ….your writing is refeshing ….thank you…bkm